Nowadays, life is developing fast and we have to work in high quality, concentrate on business in high level. So we haven’t got time for some kind of entertainment such as: chatting, watching movie, enjoying coffee…so music is a kind of entertainment that fit for modern people because we can listen to music while working. It not only doesn’t spend much time but also help us feel comfortable. Therefore, I think music play a necessary role in modern life.
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Music help us relax, feel comfortable.
§ After a hard working day, music help we relax.
§ When something makes us confuse, let’s listen a favorite song, we’ll feel easier.
§ When we’re sad, a funny song can help us feel better.
Music helps us communicate what we want to say to our lovers.
§ It’s difficult to say “I love you” to our parents, music will help us.
§ Music helps us say “sorry” to our friends when we have fault.
§ Music helps us connect to everyone in the world.
Music makes human life more interesting, happier and better.
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Trả lờiXóaYou have a nice idea
Trả lờiXóaGrammar is good
Coherence is fair
Logical is good
Unity is fair
Why don't you arrange your outline again.
It looks like an outline of paragraph, not essay
introduction is ok
Trả lờiXóagrammar is good
Good development
Trả lờiXóaUse of vocabulary is not very good: life??? is developing fast and we have to work in high quality, concentrate on business in high level....